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mastering.the.cut

by Caligula's Launderette


mastering.the.cut

I am heavy of the mind
and running out of ways
to understand the black leaguing
battalions launching greek fire
into my battlements:
armed with the old cracked men
and little boys their heads
already on pikes.

I splintered myself open,
rib-bones shattering at sudden
impact of centred trebuchets;
(scalpel in hand, to cut away
at heart and lungs.) to scourge the
scorched earth, to do away with
the yellow-sickly pulp.

cannon fodder, I’ve made myself,
I cannot escape that. but I am tired-
oh-so-tired, my limbs weak and worried,
of this dissension -

this fracas of mouth and mind.


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Thu Sep 28, 2006 6:28 am
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wow. I mean w-o-w. dude. Um, okay, I came here with the purpose of reading some of your stuff, since you've been so kind in reading mine, and now....yeah, I feel like bashing my head against a wall my stuff's no where near as cool as this.
i mean wow.
imagery--incredible, so very, totally there
rhythm--magnificent, everything flowed so well
what else is there to say? fantastic!




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Mon Sep 18, 2006 8:34 am



Hmm... yeah that is pretty incongruous. I am going to try and find another image that works better for that,

Thanks honey.
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Sun Sep 17, 2006 4:29 pm
xanthan gum says...



the yellow-sickly pulp.

These adjectives don't go with the mood.

Nothing useless left - you're too good.





Worry does not empty tomorrow of its sorrow, it empties today of its strength.
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